What would you say if I asked you to tell me what you think is causing the death of so many people in the horn of Africa? AIDS? Starvation? War? Would it surprise you if I told you that it all boils down to the women of Africa? Kofi Annan attempts to do just this in his essay “In Africa, Aids Has a Woman's Face.” Annan uses his work to tell us that women make up the “economic foundation of rural Africa” and the greatest way for Africa to thrive is through the women of Africa's freedom, power, and knowledge.
Kofi Annan persuades his readers that Africa's fate lies in their women with several different ideas. These ideas can be condensed down to two main topics. First, women are the main agriculture workers in Africa. When the mother of a family dies her farming knowledge goes with her. This, in turn, causes farming in her family to dwindle and eventually leads to starvation. Second, when a mother dies in Africa it has a ripple effect on her family. When she dies, her children are often orphaned. Her death can also cause her older female children to drop out of school so they can help to support their family. Without proper education, these children are more likely to not know how to protect themselves against AIDS. Annan closes his essay with the hope that the problem is at least starting to get better, noting that AIDS infection rates have declined throughout Africa.
If I were asked to rewrite this essay, I would try to give more direct individual solutions to each problem that is presented. Through the use of examples, such as the issue of farming and education, I can help to draw the reader in with not only what the problems are, but possible solutions to each of these problems. Using this outline I will attempt to do just that in the following paragraphs.
Simply allowing the death of one farmer to cease food production for a community, no matter how small, should not be acceptable. The issue seems to be, how can we get the community more invested in the health and well-being of the local farmers? Community shared farming is one possible way to promote care of farmers in the community. When crops are planted, people pay upfront for a...